Critique my University of Scouting dissertation draft

Looks very impressive. I'll add more thoughts later. I'm thinking mainly of how to present it in a way thats attractive. It seems to me that someone who's succesfully hiked with traditional gear is going to be a bit skeptical of someone who suggest they change everything. They might be willing to consider dropping some weight (especially for a smaller kid) but might be resistant to a radical do-over. Of course on the other hand there's no point in reading twenty pages and spending a chunk of money to drop 2 pounds off a 40 pound packweight so balance is the key.
Overall I like what you've got. Would pictures or diagrams be appropriate?

I just downloaded the PDF and will comment further, but here are a few to start:

–Yes, I think images and graphics are particularly useful.
–Where you refer to products, such as the reference to gaiters, I suggest you indicate an end-note, and use that to define the item and then perhaps reference particular brands or models. Folks not familiar with the product will appreciate such things.
–This level of effort will be of value to Scouts far beyond Indiana, Mr. Music Man. Consider a geographically-broad version for "donation" to BPL, like Doug Prosser's great article that's linked off the front page and can be linked off of your Troop, District or Council site.

YIS, Erik Basil

I look forward to your extended thoughts.

My only problem with images is I don't want to just copy from everywhere else. Mike C's would be perfect for this type of document, for example. Let em know where you think pix would be particularly useful if there are specific sections.

If it wasn't obvious, I'm focusing on gear rather than technique. Where it seemed appropriate I added in some usage tips. I suppose I should add in some more since I specifically mention needing to know how to use the gear, but that could easily add several pages.

As for the references to specific brands or gear, I tried to limit that since things change so much and models disappear. I was thinking for the gear list appendix that I'd have at least some of the relevant gear makers URLs so the reader could find more info. Speaking of the gear list, I've been waffling back and forth on whether to just list pertinent items at the end of each chapter rather than at the very end.

One of the other reasons I limited it geographically was I have a lot of knowledge from being at BPL the past 2.5 years but not a lot of experience yet and none when it comes to Scouting because I can't get the troop to leave car camping yet. Thus, I wrote what seemed like common sense based on all I've read from various people associated with BPL in some form. I would welcome collaborating with others to extend this to include how things might change for mountains, desert, rain forest, etc. once I'm done with my official dissertation.

This will be available on my council's site. If Addie would want to add it here, that is fine. I don't know where it would fit beside Doug's fine articles.

Oh, if anyone has a catchier title, that would be nice. I actually like "Pack less and do more" but that seemed too close to BPL's tagline.

Great stuff,

I would think a bit more on who your audience is, the scouters leading trips or the scouts. I am not sure it is possible to address to the two different audiences in the same "dissertation."

In my local council, the goal of high adventure training is to prepare the leaders to put together safe and fun trips.

You state" Clearly the main objective of lightweight backpacking is to carry less weight without sacrificing safety or much comfort."

I would augment this for the scout leaders. If the packs are lighter, the scouts (and scouters) are less tired and have more fun and are safer.

> I would think a bit more on who your audience is, the scouters leading trips or the scouts. I am not sure it is possible to address to the two different audiences in the same "dissertation."

Could you expound on why you think this? The gear for both would be very similar though Scouters can put more money into it, of course. I also noted a few spots where the gear may be different. I can make it more obvious (see 3rd paragraph of Intro) perhaps? Or are you saying I've left out too many details (dumbed it down)?

This will not be read by many Scouts (in my council at least) so the main audience is Scouters (again to hopefully pass it down to their troops/crews).

> I would augment this for the scout leaders. If the packs are lighter, the scouts (and scouters) are less tired and have more fun and are safer.

So more obvious than the 2nd paragraph of Chap 1?

Thank you for your thoughts.

I have some hopefully constructive feedback. Most of what you wrote reads well; I'm just pointing out the things that stood out to me. I also have a title suggestion, as requested–it's the "lighter" version of your original: Backpacking: Smart, Fun, & Light

Abstract: Finish last paragraph more strongly. The first two sentences of the last paragraph are great; could you make a connection to building fine young men who also use their heads to make informed decisions?

Introduction: Grandma Gatewood is a good start, and may be new to many readers, but she is used really often in this “intro to lightweight hiking” type of article/essay. Do YOU have any personal anecdotes?

End of Chapter 2, last paragraph: “it may be necessary to pre-tape them.” I don’t think most Scouts/Scouters are aware of Leukotape or technique—they might think of moleskin—and may be confused by the reference. *I see your clear duct-tape suggestion later in the article.

Chapter 5: Use proper notation for length (3’x6’), temperature (degrees F), etc. Explain what a CCF pad is before using the acronym, or just say “closed cell foam.” Sleeping bag section could be condensed and/or include a paragraph break.

Chapter 6: Kitchen, Food, and Water: Could you break this up into a slightly condensed summary of gear and technique followed by another section or chapter that presents techniques in a chronological order? I’m envisioning a Part One: Camp and Kitchen Gear, and Part Two: Evening and Morning Routines. I think the second part would be of greater use once on the trail. How do we apply the gear and technique in a timely manner using the patrol method? This would be a major change, but you might at least consider breaking up or condensing the chapter in another way to make it less wordy—lots of good info in there though.

What not to take: Yes, this is controversial especially with institutions like Scouts. You have a pretty good list. Not too much rationale on the headlamp though. I find Scouts have a hard time not blinding themselves or their cohorts with them during conversation, and they impede night vision more than a light held at the waist (could be a headlamp…). On the other hand, they are harder to drop in the bushes since they are attached to the head. Also, one multitool per group (carried by a Scouter?) could be useful if the stove, frame packs, poled tents, fishing hooks/gear etc. require it, otherwise be sure you include specific items in the repair kit.

General: Punctuation goes inside quotations. “Like this.” Any time you are thinking (or writing) that a topic is outside the scope of the paper, consider adding a footnote or endnote to make the main body of the text more concise.

Your audience is Scouters. How can they empower the boys to make these decisions? What are the first steps to inspiration and implementation? Again, closing with a personal anecdote or experiences might be helpful.

This is a great draft and your enthusiasm shows in your writing.

> Do YOU have any personal anecdotes?

Not really. I started light almost 3 years ago since I found this site. Gatewood was the best example of lightweight backpacking not being a new idea that I could recall. I really didn't know much about her until I decided to look her up. Pretty amazing.

I should have included the CCF abbrev the first time I used it a couple sentences earlier.

I was trying to stay away from technique as I said above but evening/morning routines may be a good one to expand on. However, as I also said in a post above, I have no practical experience with Scouts since my troop isn't doing this yet. I could just do common sense though.

> one multitool per group (carried by a Scouter?) could be useful

I guess I somehow deleted that. I was pretty sure I had that in the troop repair kit at one time. I guess that answers my WHAT ELSE? comment. LOL

I see I did mess up my punctuation at times. See what 4 years of honors English gets you? Of course, that was a while ago. :) But I also haven't proofread it yet.

Nessmuk and Horace Kephart are both well before Grandma Gatewood. I have a couple of quotes that I used in my lightweight course before I cut it down. Kephart carefully documents his lightweight kit.

We do not go to the green woods and crystal waters to rough it, we go to smooth it. We get it rough enough at home…
— Nessmuk (George Washington Sears), 1884

This is the hardest problem in outfitting. To equip a pedestrian with shelter, bedding, utensils, food, and other necessities, in a pack so light and small that he can carry it without overstrain, is a fine art.
— Horace Kephart, 1916

Hmm, a multitool "could be useful"? That means "leave it at home". If you don't have a planned use for it or a known risk that it addresses, leave it at home.

I've spent hundreds of nights camping and I can't think of a time that I needed a multitool. That includes a few equipment repairs, like reattaching a hipbelt to an internal frame pack.

Any other comments (aside from Walter who is emailing instead)?

Broad thoughts
I like your content but I think it might be good to make lightweight backpackign more attractive before going into specifics.
There are two extremes when people look at UL backpacking and don't think its for them.
1. Some say "Well sure that tent is a bit lighter but whats the difference between carrying 38 pounds and 40 pounds?" In other words they don't think going light will make enough difference to be worthe the trouble.
2. On the other extreme people see someone with a tiny little SUL pack and think thats way too extreme for them. When I first read about “going light” on Golite.com the overall tone of it made me feel like they were promoting a new religion not giving me a few backpacking tips. I remember thinking “Yeah it would be nice to lighten my pack a bit but this is extreme.” Maybe I over-reacted but I wasn’t yet interested in changing my whole approach to backpacking and “ultra light” sounded like something adventure racers would do not ordinary mortals like me.

You want to tell people that going lighter is much more fun and it's easy; they don’t have to change everything about the way they backpack.

You might give a list of what you are NOT going to do

1. First your approach is not a suffer-fest. You will not compromise on staying warm, staying sheltered and getting enough to eat.
2. You are not going to be buying super expensive gear.
3. You will not be buy super fragile gear.
4. You do not have to learn exotic wilderness skills in order to have a lighter pack.

Sleeping Bags Section
Might mention that the new European rating system is more accurate.

Ten Essentials Section
I highly doubt an entire scouting group is going to get into a survival situation together, although injuries are always a possibility. I would guess a more likely and more dangerous situation would be one or two scouts getting separated. Here are a couple things I’ve done with my little brother. I made sure he had a knife, a firestarter, space blanket, emergency poncho and whistle ON HIS PERSON. If for some weird reason he’d gotten separated from me and his pack he had some basic survival gear to get him through a cold night and a whistle for signaling. Just as important it might have helped him not panic. I don’t know if that would be a good idea or not for scouts but I like the idea of everyone having basic survival gear in their pockets.

Mike,
I received your PM, but cannot reply to it. You've reminded me I did a markup and if you email me at AOl as EBasil… I'll zap back at'cha.

Just uploaded the most recent rev of this for any last minute comments. Just need to finish the appendices. Would like a better Abstract, too, but that's a minor quibble.

I can't think of a time that I needed a multitool. That includes a few equipment repairs, like reattaching a hipbelt to an internal frame pack.

So have I (someone else's pack) … and my fingers did heal in a week or two … and the job took twice as long as when I did similar with a multi-tool (time during which I was unable to hike!)

It has been accepted, but they said it was fine if there were things I wanted to add so any last minute critiques are welcome! The PDF is now here.

and everyone is entitled to my opinion.

I would give the paper an "A", but I personally disagree with a few items. No big deal, just personal preference.

I consider tents with zip up bug nets essential in country where West Nile Virus mosquitoes are present. If you choose to run that risk yourself, fine, but don't run that risk with other people's kids. Tarptent makes from great tarp based tents, with floors and bug netting.

ground cloth: not needed if you have a tarp tent. Footprint not needed either.

pillow – not needed
towel – not needed
bandana – not needed
carabiner – are you kidding me? I hook about 3 of the tiny keyring type biners on my pack, to hang my crocs from or something, but not a full size carabiner.

wind layer and rain layer. Wind layer not needed if you have a rain coat.

Ponchos are so impractical I would not recommend then to protect someone elses kid from getting wet, hypothermic, and dead. There is cheap, and there is stupid.

reflector for stove – not needed.

odorproof bag – not needed in any bear country I've been in

1/4" nylon cord – I use 150 pound test woven dacron fishing line. You can take a lot more of it, its much less bulky, and its plenty strong enough to hang a pack from a tree.

Aqua Mira "preferred"? The convenience of instant water when you are dying of thirst make a water filter worth it to me. The MSR hyperflow if pretty light. Having had a hiking partner get sick with giardia, I would not risk it with scouts.

UV water treatment is crap. When you need them the batteries are dead or there is a lot of turbidity in the water. Junk in my book.

index card with scouts medical information? really? you have that much time on your hands when leading a scout trip? I don't.

folding saw – is pretty handy when camping where a fire is allowed. It adds a lot of atmosphere to the camp.

pack cover – way worth it to me.

brimmed hat – a bill hat is fine with me.

cooking gear – for adults I would heartily recommend the Caldera Cone, which comes with an alcohol stove, and I take an outback oven for my own luxuries: bisquits, cornbread, pizza, brownies. for scouts, canister stoves all the way.

scouts using a Swiss Army classic. smart, sufficient, but they LOVE knifes. I can't deprive them of their greatest joy. I at least try to steer them to a lockback knife. For me, I take a Mora knife.

"I highly doubt an entire scouting group is going to get into a survival situation together"

Except that scout troops are led by guys trying to be helpful but not having much experience. I was involved in a mountain rescue mission involving a whole scout troop. They had rain for about 2 days, everybody and everything got wet, and they decided to make a run for it. They left their gear, and headed up the trail, basically every man for himself. We got one kid to the hospital with a temperature of 94 F and headed back to find others. When talking to a kid in a car, he said that there were two scouts behind him. We checked around in other cars, and they had not shown up, and were unaccounted for. They would be dead, but they walked out to a different trail head.

Ouch Bob thats sounds like a bad situation. They left their gear?!?!

>"I highly doubt an entire scouting group is going to get into a survival situation together"

I'm not sure if that thought came from the essay or the from another poster, but I agree with Bob, Scout groups can get in trouble. I was a serious caver for a number of years and have reviewed all the caving accidents every year since. There's a certain flavor of a scout trip gone wrong versus "spelunkers" (what cavers call unexperienced people) versus cavers from an NSS Grotto.

The NSS cavers are much, much likely to self-rescue despite being on more expeditionary trips.

The spelunkers are much more likely to have very substandard equipment (less than a light per person versus cavers with three per person, etc, etc), no experience, and often with sex, drugs and rock&roll involved.

The Scout groups, as Bob mentioned, can be lead by someone who had a half-baked idea and with completely good intentions leads another father and 8 boys when really, that guy should have gotten much more experience first, himself, so he could pick a more reasonable first effort. Then when things start to go wrong – rising water, a stuck kid, overdue, lights giving out, etc – as a group they don't have the reserves of a caving group – a group that goes out regularly splits up rescue gear, knows each other's limits and agrees above all they need to remain safe.

Obviously in my sampling, I only see the scouting trips gone bad, but from my own scouting days, without some depth in your outer Scouts, boys who are have more strength, experience and judgement, you can end up needing to both babysit and conduct some sort of self-rescue. That's tough. With, say Scouts of 16, 16, 17, 17 and a JASM of 18 who have all camped and BPed together for 4-5, you can reasonsibly tackle more ambitious trips with some 13-14 year olds along. But a lot of troops don't have that "deep bench" and need, IMO, to take small steps to build that depth.

But I'll also note that I see the same patterns in some of the Scouting groups described in "Death in the Canyon". Again, obviously, these are worst outcomes of the worst-planned trips. And thousands of Scouts have had poor, good, and great trips in GCNP without any deaths. But again, I see where one mover and shaker can get a party of 10 WAY over their heads, in a way that if you had a group of 8-10 adult participants, someone would have said, "Woah, let's reconsider" before things got so dire.

Michael,

Sorry, I haven't read your piece, but a thought, anyway, from my Scouting experience:

We tended to pack as individuals for clothes and sleeping, as a patrol for cooking and as a troop for very few things (first aid, flag, bugle?). And mostly that's fine because you want some level of consequences to be experienced so that education takes place and planning improves in the future.

But if there was just a bit of redundancy spread through the troop, it would be reasonable for everyone to cut things a little closer, and be a lot lighter. For instance, if there was one complete synthetic outfit and maybe a pair of flip-flops along, you could give extra clothing to the kid who fell in the creek or forgot his jacket at the last campsite or melted his shoe on the campfire circle. Because I've seen all those things happen on Scout trips.

Bob,

> towel – not needed
> bandana – not needed

What do you have that takes this function?

> carabiner – are you kidding me?

You'll note that is on the do NOT buy list

> Wind layer not needed if you have a rain coat.

True. That's what I do, and you'll note the gear list doesn't have a wind shell. Just hiking pants and shirt that are meant to function more as a wind shell than base layer.

> Ponchos

I really didn't want to leave those in there anyway. :)

> reflector

I know most don't use it, but it's in there for LNT mostly.

> odorproof bag

Not needed per se but they work (if used properly of course). Many times in bear country I've had to use improper hangs or not hang it at all. Only time I've had an issue was in trunk of my car before I was using OPSAKs.

> nylon cord

I'll add the dacron/spectra fishing line as a suggestion. I would have thought that would cut into branches being so thin (another LNT concern).

> Aqua Mira

Should never be dying of thirst if you plan water storage appropriately. AM can't fail like filters can. I suppose having a filter for a troop as backup is OK. Many filters aren't small enough to get the bacteria.

> Medical info.

Index card with allergies and needed meds is a lot lighter and simpler than having all their medical forms to sift though. Can't imagine having more than a few Scouts names and info on it.

> Folding saw

Not needed. Shouldn't be using branches you can't break by hand or foot anyway.

> Pack cover

Your luxury item I guess. Not needed when you have a liner.

> Hat.

Ball cap is fine as long as you use the bandana you left behind to cover ears and neck. :)

> cooking gear

Other than shelters, I wouldn't let adults use camping gear the Scouts shouldn't. I won't take my cat stove on Scout outings anymore.

Thanks for the comments!

When we found the group, two adults were carrying the kid like a piece of cord wood, under their arms on one hip. He was a rigid plank. We got him to a car, stripped his wet clothes off, had the heater going full blast, and the only sound me made was a strange groan once in a while.

and yes, they had left all their gear, and it was just a desperate hike to get to the cars to escape. There was no adult bringing up the rear, and if a kid got left behind, he was on his own to get out. They had hiked down into a canyon, and the hike out was all uphill.

Michael, your paper is about the perfect setup for scouters or scouts to strive for. Adults have a fair chance of achieving your gear list. A scout would not have a chance until he built up his gear for a few years, assuming his family has some money. Most kids just don't have $300-$500 for this gear. I keep spare raincoats and external frame packs around for kids starting out in our troop. The external frames are good for when a kid has a big bulky sleeping bag that would not fit in an internal frame pack. You can get a blue foam sleeping pad for $5 at Walmart. We used ensolite in the days before thermarests, and it was better than nothing. Kids weigh a lot less than adults and that should be fine for them.

towel: I'm ok with air drying

bandana: my pots have handles, so I don't need a hot mit. Having never taken a bandana, I guess whatever they are used for I use something else or do without.

folding saw: depends on the trip, but sometimes its very useful. I try to get my son to carry it.

using Caldera alcohol stove when scouts can't use alcohol stoves: my scouts never have complained about it. I do more complex cooking on it, and share my cakes, brownies, cobblers from it, so they don't mind. They are totally uninterested in cooking anything but water and freeze dried foods. I also use a neo aire and many other items which scouts are financially unable to use.

Bob,
Yeah, I think it's unrealistic for most Scout families to outfit a Scout with this gear list right off the bat. Even if I had tons of money I'd be hesitant to plop down $300 on gear until I knew my son enjoyed doing this. It gives them something to strive for. Maybe I should add something about that, too. I never totaled up what it would cost since you never know what you can find used vs having to buy on sale or heaven forbid normal retail.

Part of my wood badge ticket was to buy the Troop some gear newer Scouts could use. I don't have the funds at present to have my own stash.