That's a pretty good list. only a couple things jump out.
I'll pass along the 1st piece of advice that I got when I posted my first list; drop the rain pants unless the forecast is for definite extended rain. I'm still fairly new to the Sierra, but my 1st impressions are that summer rainstorms are fairly predictable and short. If it's hot out, just let your nylon shorts/pants get wet, and dry quickly. That's a half pound savings right there. Or buy something like the ULA rain wrap at ~3 oz. It works well.
The 2nd thing I notice was 1.9 oz for a writing pad. Do you writea lot? Do you need an entire notepad, or can you just bring a few pages of one? I take 3×5 note cards and write small if I want to write. With a pencil stub its only .5 oz,(or less since my scale only measure to the quarter oz.) Or if I print off trip directions from a book, I just write on the back of those. Or on the back of your wilderness permit if you have one of those. I kind of like doing stuff like that because it becomes kind of a souvenier of the trip.
The sewing kit might be a little heavy as well. Needle + floss is all you need.
I'm being picky here because your list is way better than mine.
Does your 1.3 liter pot assume 2 people? Because that's a big pot for one.
Are you putting your sleeping bag in the dry sack? can it fit all the gear you need to keep dry? Because again, with the summer rain in the sierra, I'd say pick eiter dry sack/pack liner or pack cover and save a couple oz. Both is overkill. If you need a bigger pack liner, get those stretchy garbage/trash compactor bags for cheap.
Depending on the type of ground you're camping on,
(not too rocky/not too sandy) you could probably get away with lighter titanium shepards hook stakes and save .75 oz or so.
Have you used the NeoAir small yet? I just did on a 2-nighter, and I have to say it almost feels like cheating to sleep that comfortably when camping.